You are so kind.Please continue to send any information about haiku.It will be greatly appreciated. Peace and the joy you bring with your warmth and generous spirit. Claire
It’s wonderful to hear another’s process, thank you for sharing. I often do something similar, but as I’ve shared before, I also tend to write many versions from different aspects of things I think of. And here I’m doing it again… 😉
Opium red waves
Heads dance a dream on the wind
Heads look up to sky
Edit as I go.
Knowing before I write words
Yes. Most of the time.
Lol. Well... I try mostly to do that... occasionally a new way of saying the line will come into view... potentially moving to the final line.
You are so kind.Please continue to send any information about haiku.It will be greatly appreciated. Peace and the joy you bring with your warmth and generous spirit. Claire
Here's a link to a Wikipedia article that has a lot of info. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Haiku Haiku On!
Sun seeds red pink faces
Wasteland of poppies corpse flower
Oozes yellow balm blind dreams
Thy take the seeds of sun
Roots of fore strings of a bow
Poppies red prayer blooms
OK I tried again.Tears cracked.
Do I ever get to vent?
SH$T, then more Sh$T
Tears for Claire
I love the color red so I find this appealing. Yes, sometimes you write haiku like huh. No I have to change that word
Oooh, I love seeing the edits!
It’s wonderful to hear another’s process, thank you for sharing. I often do something similar, but as I’ve shared before, I also tend to write many versions from different aspects of things I think of. And here I’m doing it again… 😉
Poppies of old days
OG as I think of them
Simple red paper
On Flanders Field, red
poppies grow, swathing a path
so we remember
Crimson like the blood
of men who did not come home
so we remember
Papery roses
So delicate and yet so tough
Determined poppies
How they bloom each year
Poppies are as obstinate
as Austen novels
Obstinate bloom, red
as the blood they symbolize
Je me souviens
Obstinate bloom, red
as the blood they symbolize
I choose remembrance
Thank you for breaking down your process.Your sharing the work in progress was an enormous gift within concise movements of the haiku emergence.
Thanks beyond thanks.Peace and joy to you always.
Please continue illustrating the. Process. Claire